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Is the phrase "Once upon a time..."
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Monthly Writing Prompt
For this month's writing prompt write a scene using the following sentence to start;

The streets were deserted. Where was everyone? Where had they all gone?

Writing Tip
Our monthly writing tips are written by our very own TerishD. You can read more in Terish's Blog located in "The Abstractions" area of the forum.

Look Back

When not able to write ahead, it helps to look back. In my case I had written a paragraph ahead of the story. What I needed to do was add a section of exposition (talking) presenting some facts. In going back, I realized that I could insert a section where a 'tour' of the surroundings could be done. This allowed for character interaction, story development, and other things that enabled me to present the facts in an entertaining manner.

One should not face a writer's block with the mentality of bursting through it. I have found in my own experience that a writer's block is usually due to my mind indicating that it has a problem in 'channeling' the story. One reason might be a re-imagining of certain story points. Another reason however is that there is a problem in where you are at in the story, so you need to look back and find out the problem with the 'journey' that prevents the tale from advancing.

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oskar

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PostSubject: she only exist in dreams   she only exist in dreams Icon_minitimeDecember 30th 2009, 8:22 am

She only exist in a dream
She only existed in a dream an old man dreamt, in his lonely cottage,
when sitting by the fireside patting his dog’s head. Knock on his door,
there she stood looking a dream and since he knew her he invited her
in. His dog happy too it had a bald pat top of its head, and the wood
in the hearth roared its approval. The elderly man was content too
only the real thing spoke a lot, burped, ate and used too much water
when having a shower and the real sex wasn’t that great either.
When the aged man awoke his chimney corner was cold and full of
ashes, but he was glad it had been a bad dream – perhaps too much
red win had cut down on the booze a bit- He sighed let out the dog,
went into the kitchen and made a cup of coffee, feeling quite relived
that his wishes had not come true.
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PostSubject: Re: she only exist in dreams   she only exist in dreams Icon_minitimeDecember 30th 2009, 2:03 pm

To be honest, I don't quite understand. 'He dreamed' is the only aspect of this piece that makes sense, even though I doubt that someone could pat the dogs head while he was dreaming, maybe I'm taking your words to literal.

There are some mis-spellings and bad grammar, the spellings are a big no-no unless you are doing some fancy type of word play but the grammar thing I can't really complain about because I too have problems with grammar.

The structure of most of the pieces you have posted here is enormously unbalanced. It makes your pieces hard to read and or comprehend.
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