Leaka
Number of posts : 334 Age : 32 Location : I'm one of the voices in your mind Current Mood : Registration date : 2008-09-25
| Subject: Coffee Girl October 2nd 2008, 2:54 pm | |
| Another really short poem:
Coffee girl I see you everyday as start the machines in the morning Coffee girl you giggle at me with every word I say
I don't know why coffee girl, but you make me want to stay there and watch you make coffee everyday | |
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Bick
Number of posts : 144 Age : 33 Location : St. Louis, Missouri Registration date : 2008-09-09
| Subject: Re: Coffee Girl October 2nd 2008, 6:55 pm | |
| - Quote :
- everyday as start the
you might be needed there, but maybe that's purposeful? I liked it It made it's point, and was rather cute. | |
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Leaka
Number of posts : 334 Age : 32 Location : I'm one of the voices in your mind Current Mood : Registration date : 2008-09-25
| Subject: Re: Coffee Girl October 4th 2008, 9:04 pm | |
| - Bick wrote:
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- everyday as start the
you might be needed there, but maybe that's purposeful?
I liked it It made it's point, and was rather cute. I actually need a you there "everyday as you start the" Oooopsy! Cute, how? | |
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Kellycakes
Number of posts : 1136 Age : 46 Location : State of Thankfulness! Current Mood : Registration date : 2008-07-17
| Subject: Re: Coffee Girl October 28th 2008, 4:21 am | |
| It is very short, cute and flirty, you should expand on this one, make it longer but don't force it. | |
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