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HYdraMStar
Number of posts : 1170 Age : 45 Location : Charlotte, NC Current Mood : Registration date : 2008-07-20
| Subject: Who Knew It First? January 29th 2009, 9:27 am | |
| Who Knew it First? by Hydra M. Star
My thoughts of you Are as yet imperfective Impure and inevitable.
Your name, your face Are trapped inside My head.
When it is done And the truth is Finally not unspoken Which of us Will we say Knew it first? | |
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Urs
Number of posts : 569 Location : Corner of Insane Ave & Stupid St. in the State of Denial Current Mood : Registration date : 2008-09-23
| Subject: Re: Who Knew It First? January 29th 2009, 3:37 pm | |
| I am a little confused as to what this poem is supposed to be about. | |
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John Yamrus
Number of posts : 129 Registration date : 2008-09-04
| Subject: Re: Who Knew It First? January 29th 2009, 5:28 pm | |
| i'm a bit confused as to what the heck "imperfective" is supposed to mean. sounds like you're mixing a couple of words into one. i still have no idea what it means. john | |
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HYdraMStar
Number of posts : 1170 Age : 45 Location : Charlotte, NC Current Mood : Registration date : 2008-07-20
| Subject: Re: Who Knew It First? January 29th 2009, 5:52 pm | |
| - John Yamrus wrote:
- i'm a bit confused as to what the heck "imperfective" is supposed to mean. sounds like you're mixing a couple of words into one. i still have no idea what it means.
john im·per·fec·tive [ìmpər féktiv] adj indicating incomplete action: used to describe a verb aspect expressing action that is not completed. | |
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John Yamrus
Number of posts : 129 Registration date : 2008-09-04
| Subject: Re: Who Knew It First? January 29th 2009, 5:55 pm | |
| well i'll be dog-gonned! i looked it up all over the place and couldn't find a thing. good for you! john | |
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Urs
Number of posts : 569 Location : Corner of Insane Ave & Stupid St. in the State of Denial Current Mood : Registration date : 2008-09-23
| Subject: Re: Who Knew It First? January 29th 2009, 5:57 pm | |
| I looked it up Imperfective and I am at a loss on how it fits with this application. I get the idea that it is a poem about looking at the situation with your lover/mate and then going "This is going no place" and then wondering which of you knew that it was dead end road first. But the poem does not make that clear, and even if I might have had this right, it is because I had to pull that out of knowing you Hydra (Well your style), not the poem itself. Know what I mean? I think a few more lines to get a feel might better, something to clue me in. | |
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HYdraMStar
Number of posts : 1170 Age : 45 Location : Charlotte, NC Current Mood : Registration date : 2008-07-20
| Subject: Re: Who Knew It First? January 29th 2009, 9:40 pm | |
| I did actually write another verse to it that would have made it more clear, but I didn't like it. I may take another stab at it... and no that's not what it means at all. Sort of the opposite. | |
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Urs
Number of posts : 569 Location : Corner of Insane Ave & Stupid St. in the State of Denial Current Mood : Registration date : 2008-09-23
| Subject: Re: Who Knew It First? January 29th 2009, 11:07 pm | |
| There is no way on this earth that I would have read that and thought too people falling in love or realizing that they were falling for each other at all. | |
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