x_paramore
Number of posts : 41 Age : 31 Location : Just Follow The Paramore Music. xP. Registration date : 2008-08-28
| Subject: But Words Will Always Hurt Me August 28th 2008, 4:48 pm | |
| A/N: Wrote this about 2 years ago, I was about.. 14. XD. I don't know why but it's always been the favorite of mine of my poetry. *shrugs*. So I guess... ''enjoy''. :P ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
Those three last words Were not the ones I wanted Were not the ones I needed Yet by them, I am haunted
Those three last words Were everything to me Were all my hopes and dreams Yet that, you fail to see
Those three last words Were entirely up to you Were totally under your control Yet you shortened it to two
Those three last words Were the meaning of my existence Were the reason that I lived Yet you put up this resistence
Those three last words Were the be all and end all Were the last thing I thought of Yet you stood there proud and tall
Those three last words I remember today Or should I say two Go Away | |
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Snacker
Number of posts : 818 Age : 39 Location : Stuck in Michigan Current Mood : Registration date : 2008-07-17
| Subject: Re: But Words Will Always Hurt Me August 28th 2008, 4:53 pm | |
| Wow this is a great piece of work. I liked that it flowed smoothly when I read it. It had a total twist in the end. Never thought that it would be like that. Great work. Keep it going | |
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x_paramore
Number of posts : 41 Age : 31 Location : Just Follow The Paramore Music. xP. Registration date : 2008-08-28
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HYdraMStar
Number of posts : 1170 Age : 45 Location : Charlotte, NC Current Mood : Registration date : 2008-07-20
| Subject: Re: But Words Will Always Hurt Me August 28th 2008, 6:50 pm | |
| "Go Away," is my favorite phrase to use when someone is annoying me with silly questions or unwanted advances, but that's neither here nor there I suppose.
I thought you did a great job of capturing the emotion. It's not perfect, but very impressive considering how young you were when you wrote it. | |
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Kellycakes
Number of posts : 1136 Age : 47 Location : State of Thankfulness! Current Mood : Registration date : 2008-07-17
| Subject: Re: But Words Will Always Hurt Me August 30th 2008, 8:14 pm | |
| I agree, your age seems to be the surprising thing to me. Its a very impressive piece considering I know a few grown ups that can't produce poetry such as this. Wonderful piece, smooth and exciting all the way to the end. Its full of teenage angst but doesn't come off as juvenile and needy. Nice job. | |
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x_paramore
Number of posts : 41 Age : 31 Location : Just Follow The Paramore Music. xP. Registration date : 2008-08-28
| Subject: Re: But Words Will Always Hurt Me August 31st 2008, 5:37 pm | |
| Oooh, thank you guys ! Teehee. It was at first for English class which I was kinda failing so I needed something good to help my grade out. :P | |
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