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Is the phrase "Once upon a time..."
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Monthly Writing Prompt
For this month's writing prompt write a scene using the following sentence to start;

The streets were deserted. Where was everyone? Where had they all gone?

Writing Tip
Our monthly writing tips are written by our very own TerishD. You can read more in Terish's Blog located in "The Abstractions" area of the forum.

Look Back

When not able to write ahead, it helps to look back. In my case I had written a paragraph ahead of the story. What I needed to do was add a section of exposition (talking) presenting some facts. In going back, I realized that I could insert a section where a 'tour' of the surroundings could be done. This allowed for character interaction, story development, and other things that enabled me to present the facts in an entertaining manner.

One should not face a writer's block with the mentality of bursting through it. I have found in my own experience that a writer's block is usually due to my mind indicating that it has a problem in 'channeling' the story. One reason might be a re-imagining of certain story points. Another reason however is that there is a problem in where you are at in the story, so you need to look back and find out the problem with the 'journey' that prevents the tale from advancing.

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PostSubject: Broken   Broken Icon_minitimeSeptember 22nd 2010, 1:45 pm

Rising and falling, rising and falling
I check my pulse and my heart’s still beating
I look to my left but you’re not there
I look outside and the world is bare

Rising and falling, rising and falling
My breath quickens but my lungs are aching
I’m gradually falling apart piece by piece
A feeling that will never cease

Rising and falling, rising and falling
Chains that creep around me, clinking
I’m not allowed to stop
Even though my body’s about to drop

Rising and falling, rising and falling
Inside my soul is crumbling
broken down and weak
and still unable to speak

Rising and falling, rising and falling
Into the darkness I am sinking
With pain I must pay the cost
for without it, I am lost
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PostSubject: Reply   Broken Icon_minitimeSeptember 22nd 2010, 3:58 pm

I usually like rhyming ones, but this one comes up a little short. One reason this did not hit me is that if you obey the rhyming rule, you need to obey others (like meter), and you did not. Another is that the depth of the scene really did not sink down enough to pull me in. Of course, it could just be me. Still, points for making the attempt. Smile.
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PostSubject: Re: Broken   Broken Icon_minitimeSeptember 23rd 2010, 5:42 pm

I actually liked this one a lot. What you're trying to say definitely gets me and it sounds to me you were in a deep when you wrote this.
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PostSubject: Re: Broken   Broken Icon_minitimeSeptember 27th 2010, 3:13 am

Thanks for the comments guys... This one just happened to be really close to home. It was a time when I felt really beaten down and broken but was having a hard time explaining it so this was the best way for me to describe it.
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