Poll | | Is the phrase "Once upon a time..." | Overused | | 33% | [ 1 ] | Underused | | 67% | [ 2 ] |
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Monthly Writing Prompt |
For this month's writing prompt write a scene using the following sentence to start;
The streets were deserted. Where was everyone? Where had they all gone?
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Writing Tip |
Our monthly writing tips are written by our very own TerishD. You can read more in Terish's Blog located in "The Abstractions" area of the forum.
Look Back
When not able to write ahead, it helps to look back. In my case I had written a paragraph ahead of the story. What I needed to do was add a section of exposition (talking) presenting some facts. In going back, I realized that I could insert a section where a 'tour' of the surroundings could be done. This allowed for character interaction, story development, and other things that enabled me to present the facts in an entertaining manner.
One should not face a writer's block with the mentality of bursting through it. I have found in my own experience that a writer's block is usually due to my mind indicating that it has a problem in 'channeling' the story. One reason might be a re-imagining of certain story points. Another reason however is that there is a problem in where you are at in the story, so you need to look back and find out the problem with the 'journey' that prevents the tale from advancing.
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Saphira
Number of posts : 124 Age : 35 Location : Münster, Germany Registration date : 2008-07-18
| Subject: Good and Bad July 22nd 2008, 5:41 am | |
| The sun streams You lie beside me The birds sing You kiss me It is warm We love each other
It rains You leave Everything is quiet You no longer kiss me? It is cold The love is over
Last edited by Saphira on July 23rd 2008, 4:23 am; edited 1 time in total | |
| | | Kellycakes
Number of posts : 1136 Age : 46 Location : State of Thankfulness! Current Mood : Registration date : 2008-07-17
| Subject: Re: Good and Bad July 22nd 2008, 8:51 pm | |
| Two sentences don't make sense.
The first: The Sun seems? Do you mean perhaps; The sun streams The second: You have never kissed me? Maybe a change to You no longer kiss me?
Short, straightforward and I like it! | |
| | | TerishD
Number of posts : 1441 Age : 64 Location : Ringgold, Louisiana Current Mood : Registration date : 2008-07-21
| Subject: Reply July 23rd 2008, 12:48 am | |
| Ack, this isn't poetry, it is lazy writing.
The meter is inconsistent. The subject is inconsistent (in fact, contradictory - you kiss me, you have never kissed me). Concise wording? I simply say that you did not bother putting out anything of substance. This 'poem' makes me believe that you were hiding your emotions, not putting them into verse.
Nope, did not like this one. | |
| | | Saphira
Number of posts : 124 Age : 35 Location : Münster, Germany Registration date : 2008-07-18
| Subject: Re: Good and Bad July 23rd 2008, 4:28 am | |
| Yeah no problem I know that not everyone like my poetry. I write what i am think and when somebody didnt like it i find this okay, Everyone have his one poetry, so thanks for your words TersihD. But you must know. I am from germany and i can not so good write my poems in english. I hope that you understand me. Thanks for your words. You are my first critic xD @ Kellycakes. Sorry i have change it I hate my english ;/ | |
| | | TerishD
Number of posts : 1441 Age : 64 Location : Ringgold, Louisiana Current Mood : Registration date : 2008-07-21
| Subject: Reply July 23rd 2008, 9:09 am | |
| I did not know about you translating the poetry from German. I took German in college (Physics major, and a lot of good Physicists are/were German), but have seldom used it, so really poor at it now. I have since learned Russian, and I find myself switching the vocabulary ("Ya ne verstehen zie").
I believe it might help if you typed the original, then presented your translation. You might find that somebody here could help with the translation. At the worse, it would allow us to check the original tempo (reading German is not that difficult, even if you don't fully understand it).
Keep trying though. It is the only way to get good at something. | |
| | | Saphira
Number of posts : 124 Age : 35 Location : Münster, Germany Registration date : 2008-07-18
| Subject: Re: Good and Bad July 23rd 2008, 10:28 am | |
| Okay thank you for your tip | |
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