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Is the phrase "Once upon a time..."
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Monthly Writing Prompt
For this month's writing prompt write a scene using the following sentence to start;

The streets were deserted. Where was everyone? Where had they all gone?

Writing Tip
Our monthly writing tips are written by our very own TerishD. You can read more in Terish's Blog located in "The Abstractions" area of the forum.

Look Back

When not able to write ahead, it helps to look back. In my case I had written a paragraph ahead of the story. What I needed to do was add a section of exposition (talking) presenting some facts. In going back, I realized that I could insert a section where a 'tour' of the surroundings could be done. This allowed for character interaction, story development, and other things that enabled me to present the facts in an entertaining manner.

One should not face a writer's block with the mentality of bursting through it. I have found in my own experience that a writer's block is usually due to my mind indicating that it has a problem in 'channeling' the story. One reason might be a re-imagining of certain story points. Another reason however is that there is a problem in where you are at in the story, so you need to look back and find out the problem with the 'journey' that prevents the tale from advancing.

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PostSubject: Change of Heart   Change of Heart Icon_minitimeAugust 26th 2008, 11:16 am

Change of Heart

The angel of regret sits alone in a sea of rock.
Her mind was left to wander,
but only a moment in time did her memory spot.

Pain and grief fills her empty soul
as she remembers the time
that burns in her heart a hole

For not long ago a love was hurt and nearly destroyed
The angel had been foolish
and nearly lost her love in a void

The angel fought hard, for the regret needed to change
She no longer wanted to feel the hopelessness
and decided to fight so that the feeling wouldn’t remain.

The angel of regret nearly lost the love of her life
She worked hard
so that the price was paid by her strife.

Now it can be seen in the distance
Two angels sitting together
One of patients and the other perseverance
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PostSubject: Re: Change of Heart   Change of Heart Icon_minitimeAugust 28th 2008, 6:57 pm

You don't keep with the rhyme scheme throughout. That's sort of important in my opinion. If you're going to limit yourself to working in rhyme then you have to stay with it. However, there is some good imagery in the piece and I think with a little reworking it could be great.
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PostSubject: Re: Change of Heart   Change of Heart Icon_minitimeAugust 30th 2008, 8:11 pm

As only one reader I enjoyed it. I don't really get the title as compared to the actual story you are telling. The rhyming is used throughout but it is evident that it is forced after the first verse. Love the ending, still don't see the change. Seems more like a reflection of past events that brought about action, not necessarily a change.
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