Kellycakes
Number of posts : 1136 Age : 47 Location : State of Thankfulness! Current Mood : Registration date : 2008-07-17
| Subject: Hearts Philander August 12th 2009, 6:35 pm | |
| Down the epitomized trail in esoteric contemplation; absorbed by the unequivocal importance of vertical. Her heart becoming her own incendiary, afflicted, and puzzled by the torment of loves journey.
Experiencing the newness elated and presumptuous; leaves the bull searching the stars for retort. Intimidated with theoretical happiness; all scamper to find their souls conformity.
Spending most of her life as a traditionalist; Allowing nothing to change her parsimonious life. She finds that the biggest metamorphosis was preeminent; prodigious even in inauspicious times.
Now with a kaleidoscopic of whirl pooled effusion; Her enigmatic heart many times cicatrized. Seems not at all roiled or even mangled; but uproarious with indispensable fancy. | |
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Urs
Number of posts : 569 Location : Corner of Insane Ave & Stupid St. in the State of Denial Current Mood : Registration date : 2008-09-23
| Subject: Re: Hearts Philander August 15th 2009, 1:18 am | |
| i really enjoyed your word choices | |
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Kellycakes
Number of posts : 1136 Age : 47 Location : State of Thankfulness! Current Mood : Registration date : 2008-07-17
| Subject: Re: Hearts Philander August 23rd 2009, 1:47 am | |
| To be honest I wrote it using the some words you wouldn't normally see in a poet's work. It's semi-confusing and thrown together, my haphazard way of trying to break away from the mundane *I love you* stuff.
Thanks Urs. | |
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Urs
Number of posts : 569 Location : Corner of Insane Ave & Stupid St. in the State of Denial Current Mood : Registration date : 2008-09-23
| Subject: Re: Hearts Philander August 24th 2009, 12:27 pm | |
| That was what I enjoyed, the rarity of the word choice, not words I would expect to see, and even had to look up most of them, but they flowed well together, so it was like looking at a "Art of words" as opposed to just reading a poem. | |
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deathbypen
Number of posts : 84 Registration date : 2008-09-11
| Subject: Re: Hearts Philander September 23rd 2009, 8:28 am | |
| I, too, looked up quite a few of the words but it was worth it. I like that despite all the specific words, it's also a little vague and broad like what the heart goes through.
It's easy to find love poems about a particular love/lover, but to describe the condition of the heart without pinpointing a specific circumstance leaves the poem very open.
I like that. | |
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Kellycakes
Number of posts : 1136 Age : 47 Location : State of Thankfulness! Current Mood : Registration date : 2008-07-17
| Subject: Re: Hearts Philander September 23rd 2009, 6:16 pm | |
| Thanks so much for your comment. Although I enjoyed writing it, I doubt that it will appeal to a wider audience because no one wants to look up every other word. | |
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