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Is the phrase "Once upon a time..."
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One should not face a writer's block with the mentality of bursting through it. I have found in my own experience that a writer's block is usually due to my mind indicating that it has a problem in 'channeling' the story. One reason might be a re-imagining of certain story points. Another reason however is that there is a problem in where you are at in the story, so you need to look back and find out the problem with the 'journey' that prevents the tale from advancing.

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Saphira

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PostSubject: A Definition of Love   A Definition of Love Icon_minitimeJuly 20th 2008, 3:39 am

Love is something indescribable
one cannot live with the love
Without love it also does not go

She gives luck to you
Love each other injured

Nobody can force itself to love
a feeling is alone for you

With many it is a great experience
With some morbidly
Many do not let go
Not even if everything is lost

From stupidity
one loses the love of his life

Often one wants to divide it
with this person
or hide

Everybody can decide
Whether one decides properly only the love knows


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PostSubject: Re: A Definition of Love   A Definition of Love Icon_minitimeJuly 26th 2008, 11:15 am

I did a slight rewrite, this is my interpretation of this piece. What do you think?


Love is something indescribable

You cannot live with it
Without love it does not work

If she is your lucky charm
Love each other injured

No one can force itself to love
This feeling is alone for you

With many it is a great experience
With some morbidly so

Not even if everything is lost
Many do not let go

From stupidity
one can lose the love of his life

Often one wants to breakup
with this person

Everybody can decide, yay or nay
Whether one decides properly only love knows

Because love is something indescribable


Another thing is the title should reflect what the piece is about. Using 'the' in front of love to me is wrong because love isn't a thing, its an emotion or feeling. Love is something uncontrollable sometimes. Therefore shouldn't be treated as a thing but rather felt through. I would name this... 'A Definition of Love'. Or something along those lines.
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PostSubject: Re: A Definition of Love   A Definition of Love Icon_minitimeJuly 26th 2008, 3:31 pm

Thank you Kelly

I have change the name of this poem
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PostSubject: Reply   A Definition of Love Icon_minitimeJuly 26th 2008, 4:18 pm

It reads to me as if both of you are attempting to be clinical instead of reaching in an attempting to pull out emotion. I just finished writing a love scene, let me thus work with this topic.

Formless and without, Love demands it place
_____No advance can be claimed, Without its redeeming grace

Though cut and battered, Love stands though trials are prolonged
_____Only with its presence, Can a union stand firm and strong

I cast my hopes skyward, Not dreaming of a better day
_____I want you as I found you, And with Love you will stay that way

Oh pity the foolish, That casts love out with ire
_____It is hard to love a building, When only rubble can be admired

Formless and without, Ever keep love in its place
_____The honor in its presence, Makes life a healthy race
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PostSubject: Re: A Definition of Love   A Definition of Love Icon_minitimeJuly 26th 2008, 4:36 pm

I love what you write Smile
I like your style really
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