Lovers' Conversation

Lovers' Conversation

Your voice radiates upon my ever attentive ear
Whispers that echo my own deep and dark desires.
Hot breath upon my flushed and panting cheek
Sends a sensual shiver down my naked spine.
For only you, and you alone, my love
Embody this secret and seductive caress.
Knowing my body as though your very own
You tell me to lie down, listen, and do as you direct.
Guiding my own touch; tracing yours from times before,
My body rises to meet my own hands, aching to feel your heat.
I desire the pressure of your body on mine; your lips against my skin.
Going beyond the point of want; entering the field of desperate need.
I beg for relief through your dark but desired directions.
You sense the urgent change in my now low and husky voice,
Let me touch, feel, explore the lips that beg for your intimate kiss!
Not yet, you respond, and I obey as if I have no other choice.
No longer knowing where the sweat ends and the wetness begins,
I love the way you make me feel; simple cause and complicated effect.
The sound of your sigh, your moan, and sexual tone of the uttered word, yes,
Will send me over the edge if you’d only simply direct it.
Now, you are ready …permission finally but lovingly granted,
Caress the jewel that will send you into tumultuous ecstasy.
Let me hear it, feel it, as if I were there with you tonight.
My fingers find my lips; hot, wet and swollen with passion’s frenzy.
The pearl of my delight hard and accepting of my relieving touch.
My body shaking, quaking as if under the spell of your very caress.
Moans escaping my lips as if compelled by this lovers’ conversation;
Explicit, exquisite, intense utterance of one simple word….yes….


Traci A. Johnston
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This one certainly isn't lacking on passion. You conveyed that very well, but honestly a couple of the lines sort of lost me and left me a little confused. The main one being, "Hot breath upon my flushed and panting cheek." The rest of the poem seems to imply cyber/phone sex, but then how would you feel his/her breath on your cheek?

the problem i have with it is i see you making the same mistake that virtually all aspiring writers make. you seem to have this uncontrollable need to load your lines with descriptives...

ever attentive ear
deep and dark desires.
flushed and panting cheek

sometimes...in most cases, in fact...less is more. this poem reminds me of those photographs of those old victorian sitting rooms where they have every bit of floor, counter and shelf covered with all kinds of unnecessary knick-nacks, bric-a-brac and junk. simplify things. you'll find your work will then have more meaning and punch.
beyond that...remember...the very essence of poetry is brevity.
take care.
john

You really should have put a warning on this, as this is adult themed material.

Beyond that, I was very sensual and erotic for a poem, if that was your intention then it was well done.

I would agree with John on this, that less is more., but that would depend on your urge, and in that regard I think the desire to make this into this seductive sensual bit of work needs some good descriptive, but consider cutting back a bit

About half way though I kind of lost if I was reading flash or a poem, so in that regard I would take what John had to say in strong consideration.

All in all, this was very good and really emotionally filled with... well... erotica.