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Is the phrase "Once upon a time..."
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Monthly Writing Prompt
For this month's writing prompt write a scene using the following sentence to start;

The streets were deserted. Where was everyone? Where had they all gone?

Writing Tip
Our monthly writing tips are written by our very own TerishD. You can read more in Terish's Blog located in "The Abstractions" area of the forum.

Look Back

When not able to write ahead, it helps to look back. In my case I had written a paragraph ahead of the story. What I needed to do was add a section of exposition (talking) presenting some facts. In going back, I realized that I could insert a section where a 'tour' of the surroundings could be done. This allowed for character interaction, story development, and other things that enabled me to present the facts in an entertaining manner.

One should not face a writer's block with the mentality of bursting through it. I have found in my own experience that a writer's block is usually due to my mind indicating that it has a problem in 'channeling' the story. One reason might be a re-imagining of certain story points. Another reason however is that there is a problem in where you are at in the story, so you need to look back and find out the problem with the 'journey' that prevents the tale from advancing.

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PostSubject: Dark......   Dark...... Icon_minitimeJuly 18th 2008, 10:44 am

Everything is getting dark
One sees no more light
at the end of the tunnel

Lost the joy of life
lost the courage
Far away from joy

Seldom the laughter
that so often sounded

I look for the light
It becomes never
again luminous

You have taken away it from me!
I want out of here.
Please...


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PostSubject: Re: Dark......   Dark...... Icon_minitimeJuly 18th 2008, 11:29 pm

This is written quite well actually. The last two verses could use a slight rewrite. I'd be happy to do that quickly for you, if you don't mind and show you what would make it read more smoothly.

The grammer of the second to last verse:
Quote :
I want here out
should be written.. I want out of here and thats done!

Great job!
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PostSubject: Re: Dark......   Dark...... Icon_minitimeJuly 19th 2008, 6:14 am

awesome poem.....
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PostSubject: Re: Dark......   Dark...... Icon_minitimeJuly 20th 2008, 3:42 am

Oh thank you both Smile
@ Kellycakes: I have change it thank you Wink

Greets Jenny

Ps: Tonight I write more here in the forum sorry i had no time yesterday No
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PostSubject: Re: Dark......   Dark...... Icon_minitimeJuly 21st 2008, 4:57 pm

Wow, this one is very powerful. You can really feel the sadness behind the words.
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PostSubject: Re: Dark......   Dark...... Icon_minitimeJuly 22nd 2008, 5:29 am

Yeah sadness is my hobby in last time xD

So i write sad poems. Happy poems are seldom

Than you all Wink

Saphi Like a Star @ heaven
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PostSubject: Re: Dark......   Dark...... Icon_minitimeJuly 27th 2008, 9:39 am

Saphia:

Very sad, very touching. Elegantly written. So many of us can relate to those words. Look ahead to the sunshine. It's there and the darkness will be gone. Great write.

Ginny
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PostSubject: Re: Dark......   Dark...... Icon_minitimeJuly 27th 2008, 11:23 am

Thank you very much Ginny.
I search the sunshine in my heart...
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