nicely done! thank you for sharing it with me. and as for rhyming...rhyme is a crutch for the uninspired. and i'm glad you liked my poem. really glad. let me tell you a story...about 2 years ago i did a book signing/reading at a coffee shop. it was sponsored by this poetry group...a bunch of self-styled "literary types". 60 or so of them. well, i did the reading and rec'd polite applause...well, after the reading i sold not one book...zero. no books...to the literary types, that is...but for the workers at the shop...the waitresses and waiters and the counter people...all but one of them bought books. those are my readers and i'm damned proud of that.
thanks.
john