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Is the phrase "Once upon a time..."
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Monthly Writing Prompt
For this month's writing prompt write a scene using the following sentence to start;

The streets were deserted. Where was everyone? Where had they all gone?

Writing Tip
Our monthly writing tips are written by our very own TerishD. You can read more in Terish's Blog located in "The Abstractions" area of the forum.

Look Back

When not able to write ahead, it helps to look back. In my case I had written a paragraph ahead of the story. What I needed to do was add a section of exposition (talking) presenting some facts. In going back, I realized that I could insert a section where a 'tour' of the surroundings could be done. This allowed for character interaction, story development, and other things that enabled me to present the facts in an entertaining manner.

One should not face a writer's block with the mentality of bursting through it. I have found in my own experience that a writer's block is usually due to my mind indicating that it has a problem in 'channeling' the story. One reason might be a re-imagining of certain story points. Another reason however is that there is a problem in where you are at in the story, so you need to look back and find out the problem with the 'journey' that prevents the tale from advancing.

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PostSubject: future wonderings   future wonderings Icon_minitimeSeptember 14th 2008, 2:46 pm

today i spoke to the careers officer.
he asked what i wanted to do when i was older.
it's always a question i've been able to answer,
from lollypop lady to ballet dancer,
i always had it.

i told him it didn't matter.

he told me i was clever.
i told him i wasn't
it's just that the others weren't either.
i told him i was serious.
he laughed.

i told him that as a kid
i wanted to be the tattooed lady in the corner of the bar,
then i wanted that woman to be a man
i wanted to be a musician, a vet,
i planned for my dreams.

now, i want a van.
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PostSubject: Re: future wonderings   future wonderings Icon_minitimeSeptember 14th 2008, 10:11 pm

I'm sorry this line completely lost me, "then i wanted that woman to be a man."

Since I assume the speaker of the poem is a female and the subject of the poem is her struggle to pick a career path I'm very confused why this line seems to spin things off onto the question of gender. If that's what the intent was?
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PostSubject: Re: future wonderings   future wonderings Icon_minitimeSeptember 15th 2008, 9:23 am

i kinda agree with H about that line...i understand it, and i understand your reasons for having it there, but in the notnext of the poem it's out of place...it momentarily jars the reader and takes them in a wrong direction. other than with this one line, though, this poem is absolutely teriffic. i think you've got something good going.
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