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Is the phrase "Once upon a time..."
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Monthly Writing Prompt
For this month's writing prompt write a scene using the following sentence to start;

The streets were deserted. Where was everyone? Where had they all gone?
Writing Tip
Our monthly writing tips are written by our very own TerishD. You can read more in Terish's Blog located in "The Abstractions" area of the forum.

Look Back

When not able to write ahead, it helps to look back. In my case I had written a paragraph ahead of the story. What I needed to do was add a section of exposition (talking) presenting some facts. In going back, I realized that I could insert a section where a 'tour' of the surroundings could be done. This allowed for character interaction, story development, and other things that enabled me to present the facts in an entertaining manner.

One should not face a writer's block with the mentality of bursting through it. I have found in my own experience that a writer's block is usually due to my mind indicating that it has a problem in 'channeling' the story. One reason might be a re-imagining of certain story points. Another reason however is that there is a problem in where you are at in the story, so you need to look back and find out the problem with the 'journey' that prevents the tale from advancing.

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PostSubject: The River   The River Icon_minitimeSeptember 14th 2008, 1:43 pm
The River

Crisp night air with shadowed moon
Veiled in wispy clouds cocoon
Wind blows softly, waters flow
The river is alive you know

Tempting with her quiet calm
Adrift within her spreading palm
But danger lurks inside her heart
Be careful now just what you start

It's never wise to block her path
And foolish to incur her wrath
Her silent mission done in peace
The rivers journey will not cease

A witness to our foolish ways
We come and go, she always stays
A timeless passage, endless flow
The river is alive you know


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PostSubject: Reply   The River Icon_minitimeSeptember 14th 2008, 7:52 pm
Well, it qualifies. It has rhythm, message, and some emotion. It does rhyme. It felt a little forced, but I will give you credit for a job well done.
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PostSubject: Re: The River   The River Icon_minitimeSeptember 14th 2008, 10:06 pm
I too felt the rhyme was a little forced, which is why in general I don't care for rhyming poetry. I do like the subject matter and the imagery of it. So over all nice work.
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