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Monthly Writing Prompt
For this month's writing prompt write a scene using the following sentence to start;

The streets were deserted. Where was everyone? Where had they all gone?

Writing Tip
Our monthly writing tips are written by our very own TerishD. You can read more in Terish's Blog located in "The Abstractions" area of the forum.

Look Back

When not able to write ahead, it helps to look back. In my case I had written a paragraph ahead of the story. What I needed to do was add a section of exposition (talking) presenting some facts. In going back, I realized that I could insert a section where a 'tour' of the surroundings could be done. This allowed for character interaction, story development, and other things that enabled me to present the facts in an entertaining manner.

One should not face a writer's block with the mentality of bursting through it. I have found in my own experience that a writer's block is usually due to my mind indicating that it has a problem in 'channeling' the story. One reason might be a re-imagining of certain story points. Another reason however is that there is a problem in where you are at in the story, so you need to look back and find out the problem with the 'journey' that prevents the tale from advancing.

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PostSubject: If Only   If Only Icon_minitimeSeptember 4th 2008, 10:26 pm

His lips lingered on the back of my neck
Warm breath dancing gracefully across caramel skin
The moistness of his tongue left a chill
Both bodies trembled with love
His hands neatly pinched clever hips
Dancing up against one another
As fingertips lightly brush my navel
Another moment my eyes would close
And I'd scream on the inside at the flames
Locked knees would weaken at the sound of his voice
And my heart will beat patiently waiting for the next move
The feeling of growth and wetness collide in minds alike
And I silently want more
He would know what I am thinking
And offer me more than I can handle
His control takes me to places never reached
At peak he would slow his pace and whisper softly
And then bring me back into his soul
I would collapse under pleasure in excitement
At his trembles my hands will dance across his back
Leaving streaks of paradise
Tight lips sucked on by each other
I would drown in his beauty
And be reborn in his eyes
As we danced in a sweaty embrace
When illumination peeked through closed doors
Candles would have fallen to ashes
And sensual oils soaked into soft skin
Eyes would not find rest unless opened
Lips will be chapped from an endless night
And the dramatic hearts would never settle
We would finally fall asleep in arms enclosed
My head on his chest
His hand on my breast
Both rising, falling, still pleading
It's here that I awake
And realize that it was my soul
Pleading 'if only'


(As I was rereading this one I found numerous errors. I decided to post it anyway; looking for some corrective criticism. I am away that it is jumping tenses (A common problem I have) along with lack of style other than freestyle.) Its still sexy and dramatic.
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