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Is the phrase "Once upon a time..."
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Monthly Writing Prompt
For this month's writing prompt write a scene using the following sentence to start;

The streets were deserted. Where was everyone? Where had they all gone?

Writing Tip
Our monthly writing tips are written by our very own TerishD. You can read more in Terish's Blog located in "The Abstractions" area of the forum.

Look Back

When not able to write ahead, it helps to look back. In my case I had written a paragraph ahead of the story. What I needed to do was add a section of exposition (talking) presenting some facts. In going back, I realized that I could insert a section where a 'tour' of the surroundings could be done. This allowed for character interaction, story development, and other things that enabled me to present the facts in an entertaining manner.

One should not face a writer's block with the mentality of bursting through it. I have found in my own experience that a writer's block is usually due to my mind indicating that it has a problem in 'channeling' the story. One reason might be a re-imagining of certain story points. Another reason however is that there is a problem in where you are at in the story, so you need to look back and find out the problem with the 'journey' that prevents the tale from advancing.

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PostSubject: Torn   Torn Icon_minitimeSeptember 2nd 2008, 1:47 am

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Each day I rise
with tears in my eyes
wondering why I have to put up with this sh*t

I go to school
act like everythings cool
when really I want to scream screw it!

I walk through each day
make believe everythings okay
and all my friends don't see it

I laugh out loud so my friends won't know
about these feelings I have, that just won't go
and only exist for something I will never get

and night after night i've lied awake and cried
for these feelings have left me torn up inside
and just don't wanna quite

These feelings I hide
will, forever, reamin, inside
or life will end as I know it...
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PostSubject: Re: Torn   Torn Icon_minitimeSeptember 2nd 2008, 2:14 am

It's okay, but if you want to say shit then say SHIT! Don't be afraid of your words and don't worry about those who might be 'offended', they aren't worth the effort. They'll just find some other reason to be incensed.
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PostSubject: Re: Torn   Torn Icon_minitimeSeptember 2nd 2008, 8:58 am

I'm not really into poetry so I can't comment on whether it's well done or not, I can only comment of if I liked it or not.

to me it doesn't flow right as a poem, but perhaps as lyrics to a song with the right music it would flow better.
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PostSubject: Re: Torn   Torn Icon_minitimeSeptember 4th 2008, 3:35 pm

It's a poem which reveals a lot of feelings. You describe them quite well.
If this poem expresses your own feelings, try to get rid of them. Friends will understand:). Otherwise, these things will pull you down.
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