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Is the phrase "Once upon a time..."
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Monthly Writing Prompt
For this month's writing prompt write a scene using the following sentence to start;

The streets were deserted. Where was everyone? Where had they all gone?

Writing Tip
Our monthly writing tips are written by our very own TerishD. You can read more in Terish's Blog located in "The Abstractions" area of the forum.

Look Back

When not able to write ahead, it helps to look back. In my case I had written a paragraph ahead of the story. What I needed to do was add a section of exposition (talking) presenting some facts. In going back, I realized that I could insert a section where a 'tour' of the surroundings could be done. This allowed for character interaction, story development, and other things that enabled me to present the facts in an entertaining manner.

One should not face a writer's block with the mentality of bursting through it. I have found in my own experience that a writer's block is usually due to my mind indicating that it has a problem in 'channeling' the story. One reason might be a re-imagining of certain story points. Another reason however is that there is a problem in where you are at in the story, so you need to look back and find out the problem with the 'journey' that prevents the tale from advancing.

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PostSubject: The Lift of Tiredness   The Lift of Tiredness Icon_minitimeAugust 31st 2008, 5:39 pm

Written as a writing exercise today, having been given the title of 'In the lift of tiredness'. Changed a bit since.

Your mind's bending back to it's original position
of Manchester life with no ambition
making you pray again for rest.
The pillow on your bed just leads your head to further slumber
and as your brain gets number you start getting stressed
at work, dressed up at weekends and you stop the protest.
Though you want to believe it's for the best
every ex-revolutionary knows
that it's not disappeared just because it's repressed.
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PostSubject: Re: The Lift of Tiredness   The Lift of Tiredness Icon_minitimeSeptember 1st 2008, 12:46 pm

I enjoyed reading this. A very thoughtful, interesting poem.
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PostSubject: Re: The Lift of Tiredness   The Lift of Tiredness Icon_minitimeSeptember 2nd 2008, 9:00 am

I loved the last line.
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PostSubject: Re: The Lift of Tiredness   The Lift of Tiredness Icon_minitimeSeptember 4th 2008, 9:17 pm

Although I get the feeling that this particular piece is about getting rest, thanks to the title, I only see hints of it in the actual piece. It seems forced and more than a little off balanced, like you were just trying to rhyme the words instead of staying true to your actual subject. It's not a bad start but I'd suggest a rewrite for clearance. Lets see more!
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