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Is the phrase "Once upon a time..."
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Monthly Writing Prompt
For this month's writing prompt write a scene using the following sentence to start;

The streets were deserted. Where was everyone? Where had they all gone?

Writing Tip
Our monthly writing tips are written by our very own TerishD. You can read more in Terish's Blog located in "The Abstractions" area of the forum.

Look Back

When not able to write ahead, it helps to look back. In my case I had written a paragraph ahead of the story. What I needed to do was add a section of exposition (talking) presenting some facts. In going back, I realized that I could insert a section where a 'tour' of the surroundings could be done. This allowed for character interaction, story development, and other things that enabled me to present the facts in an entertaining manner.

One should not face a writer's block with the mentality of bursting through it. I have found in my own experience that a writer's block is usually due to my mind indicating that it has a problem in 'channeling' the story. One reason might be a re-imagining of certain story points. Another reason however is that there is a problem in where you are at in the story, so you need to look back and find out the problem with the 'journey' that prevents the tale from advancing.

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PostSubject: Finally   Finally Icon_minitimeAugust 30th 2008, 7:28 pm

Out of here and now and in your eyes
I see a million tears passing by and by
It was hard sometimes to keep our love alive
But we tried to go on
Yes we tried, we tried, we tried

I look back, in the review-mirror
A long road, of a strong belief, that...

Finally
It’s you and me
Worlds are breaking down
And no one can see
That finally
We will be
Two everlasting souls
In a wild wild sea
Finally

We never wasted time to count our scares
But they always told us , who we are
We tried to heal the wounds with all our love
Two soul mates, with one heart

I look back, in the review-mirror
A long road, of a strong belief, that...

Out of here and now and in your eyes
I see a million stars falling down

Finally
It’s you and me
Worlds are breaking down
And no one can see
That finally
We will be
Two everlasting souls
In a wild wild sea
Finally


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PostSubject: Re: Finally   Finally Icon_minitimeAugust 30th 2008, 8:07 pm

Quote :
A long road, of a strong believe, that...

believe = belief


Another song? The chorus is perfect and the second verse breaks the whole piece down because it is only 4 lines as opposed to 5 in the first verse. The bridge is nice as well. Maybe you should rewrite this and move it over to the songwriting forum. Just my opinion.

BTW: Love the line...

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