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Is the phrase "Once upon a time..."
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 67% [ 2 ]
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Monthly Writing Prompt
For this month's writing prompt write a scene using the following sentence to start;

The streets were deserted. Where was everyone? Where had they all gone?

Writing Tip
Our monthly writing tips are written by our very own TerishD. You can read more in Terish's Blog located in "The Abstractions" area of the forum.

Look Back

When not able to write ahead, it helps to look back. In my case I had written a paragraph ahead of the story. What I needed to do was add a section of exposition (talking) presenting some facts. In going back, I realized that I could insert a section where a 'tour' of the surroundings could be done. This allowed for character interaction, story development, and other things that enabled me to present the facts in an entertaining manner.

One should not face a writer's block with the mentality of bursting through it. I have found in my own experience that a writer's block is usually due to my mind indicating that it has a problem in 'channeling' the story. One reason might be a re-imagining of certain story points. Another reason however is that there is a problem in where you are at in the story, so you need to look back and find out the problem with the 'journey' that prevents the tale from advancing.

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PostSubject: Without Him...   Without Him... Icon_minitimeJuly 27th 2008, 4:20 pm

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He brought hardened smiles; and fire soaked cheeks.
He brought tears to maple browns; to her heart erotic beats.
He covered her with sugar; he put her in her place.
What she wouldn’t give right now; to wipe the tears from her face.
She never meant to hurt him; he was so undemanding.
But now she’s lost him; to her own foolish self pity.
She could do anything; in that he made her believe.
Something however was missing; she didn’t have what he needed.
Deep within her heart; lie wounds she couldn’t control.
Her lack of trusting others; might have cost her, her soul.
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PostSubject: Reply   Without Him... Icon_minitimeJuly 27th 2008, 6:54 pm

Ack, it was going well, then oops. Remember, either go with the rhyme or go without. Modern poetry fully accepts the non-rhyming, so don't be afraid.

The poem does seem to have a good message. Don't give up on inspiration. There is no rush. Take your time and give a concept the care and attention to bring it into its own. If you don't post it today, so what? Posting it early can harm it, and actually give you a sense of fulfillment (or shame) that is not there. If you are going to let others see something, don't put it out unfinished. If you had given this one more time, it would have stepped out proudly fully showing forth its value.
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PostSubject: Re: Without Him...   Without Him... Icon_minitimeJuly 29th 2008, 2:27 pm

I've actually read this one out loud and thought I sounded better without the mixture. I've always told people over again exactly what you said. But because I'm bias against my own work I guess I just didn't listen to myself. Thank you for commenting, I hope to have a revision soon.
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PostSubject: Re: Without Him...   Without Him... Icon_minitimeJuly 29th 2008, 3:56 pm

I like it.. really
You can be more critical, i am not... beacuse of my english
But i find you poems very good Smile
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