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Is the phrase "Once upon a time..."
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Monthly Writing Prompt
For this month's writing prompt write a scene using the following sentence to start;

The streets were deserted. Where was everyone? Where had they all gone?

Writing Tip
Our monthly writing tips are written by our very own TerishD. You can read more in Terish's Blog located in "The Abstractions" area of the forum.

Look Back

When not able to write ahead, it helps to look back. In my case I had written a paragraph ahead of the story. What I needed to do was add a section of exposition (talking) presenting some facts. In going back, I realized that I could insert a section where a 'tour' of the surroundings could be done. This allowed for character interaction, story development, and other things that enabled me to present the facts in an entertaining manner.

One should not face a writer's block with the mentality of bursting through it. I have found in my own experience that a writer's block is usually due to my mind indicating that it has a problem in 'channeling' the story. One reason might be a re-imagining of certain story points. Another reason however is that there is a problem in where you are at in the story, so you need to look back and find out the problem with the 'journey' that prevents the tale from advancing.

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Saphira

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Location : Münster, Germany
Registration date : 2008-07-18

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PostSubject: I cant see it...   I cant see it... Icon_minitimeJuly 26th 2008, 4:13 am

The flowers smile at us
Trying
To tell us something

Trees move
In the wind
For they would dance

Bright colors
Everywhere
Sunbeams
Warm us up

I don't want to see that
Everyone is so happy
Can't take it

I'm so bitter
My heart is black
You turned it that way
It is today

A clot
Not useable anymore
Lost its love

It stopped beating
In my chest
But in yours

But I don't want that
Give it back to me
I'll do everything for you

You are cold
With your words
Drowning
In our tears

I can't do it anymore
Our world
Is broken

With tear-stained eyes
And bloody fingers
I put the pieces together again

Count every second
Waiting
How long it longs

Look at us
My God
What had happened?

I hate
That I love you

I'll never stop
Keks...Kruemel

(Keks/Kruemel: We always called us that way)
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Number of posts : 1441
Age : 64
Location : Ringgold, Louisiana
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Registration date : 2008-07-21

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PostSubject: Reply   I cant see it... Icon_minitimeJuly 26th 2008, 7:55 am

Style seems similar to last one, but there is no shame in working with something to improve. The phrasing holds better in this one and the imagery is more consistent. Instead of a shock at the end, there is a good finish. I thus like this poem better.
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Age : 35
Location : Münster, Germany
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PostSubject: Re: I cant see it...   I cant see it... Icon_minitimeJuly 26th 2008, 8:54 am

Yeah you are right Smile It is the same style an a little bit the same story.

Thank you Smile
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