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Is the phrase "Once upon a time..."
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Its your mistake ! Empty67%Its your mistake ! Empty
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Monthly Writing Prompt
For this month's writing prompt write a scene using the following sentence to start;

The streets were deserted. Where was everyone? Where had they all gone?

Writing Tip
Our monthly writing tips are written by our very own TerishD. You can read more in Terish's Blog located in "The Abstractions" area of the forum.

Look Back

When not able to write ahead, it helps to look back. In my case I had written a paragraph ahead of the story. What I needed to do was add a section of exposition (talking) presenting some facts. In going back, I realized that I could insert a section where a 'tour' of the surroundings could be done. This allowed for character interaction, story development, and other things that enabled me to present the facts in an entertaining manner.

One should not face a writer's block with the mentality of bursting through it. I have found in my own experience that a writer's block is usually due to my mind indicating that it has a problem in 'channeling' the story. One reason might be a re-imagining of certain story points. Another reason however is that there is a problem in where you are at in the story, so you need to look back and find out the problem with the 'journey' that prevents the tale from advancing.

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Saphira

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PostSubject: Its your mistake !   Its your mistake ! Icon_minitimeJuly 25th 2008, 6:01 pm

Shatters
On the ground

Only there
Lies my heart

On the street
Wet from the rain

Everybody steps on it
But nobody notices

The blood of love
Flows
Soon nothing is left

You stare
Without trying
To save it

Jagged
And no longer recognizable

Does it lie there
Unmistakable

I lift it up
And hold it gently

I lost my heart
In a cold night

You killed it!
But it was my life

It's your mistake
I hate you
No...

I love you!
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Age : 64
Location : Ringgold, Louisiana
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Registration date : 2008-07-21

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PostSubject: Reply   Its your mistake ! Icon_minitimeJuly 25th 2008, 7:04 pm

This one was interesting. I could pick on it, but I would be wrong. I can tell that you completely understood what you were writing. I thus will step back in respect.

While I accept the poem, my interest is on the last line. I cannot just do that in a story. I cannot simply have a character that has been hurt very badly spew out an emotion completely in defiance of what has occurred. I must take the time and use a multitude of words to justify the faith and trust in someone that wronged them. When I see it done in poetry, I thus want to gripe, but that is one difference in prose and poetry. That last line is enough here. I thus again will step back in respect.
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Age : 35
Location : Münster, Germany
Registration date : 2008-07-18

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PostSubject: Re: Its your mistake !   Its your mistake ! Icon_minitimeJuly 25th 2008, 7:11 pm

Many thanks.
Nice that you like it. Better said the last line. Is right, one cannot describe something like that in a story so fast. This is the reason why I poetry loves.

I can change from now on immediately my feelings.
Thus I point who I am real.
Many thanks
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