I do my best

Every day i hear it:

You are not able do to it
i find it no good

They want so see my blood
but i give my best
and you hate me
like the pest

but why ?
You know nothing about me
i want to feel free
You dont let me

It begin to rain
my tears
explain my pain

can you like me ?
Sorry, im not perfect
so at first
you can forgive me

I write this without a translate help. i try to learn it alone.
With the help I get no rhymes.
this is my first try to write a poem with rhymes (in english)
I hope it is okay

Ps: thank you all for reading and your comments

Okay, I appreciate the attempts at rhyme. I did mean to ask that question earlier about whether your poetry rhymed in your natural language. I know that word play, both puns and rhymes, often do not translate at all.

My next question is why do you write poetry? All of your poems are short topical ditties more fitting a simple song than a poem. Are you really feeling emotion when you write?

I write stories, novels, so I often have to sink into the mind of characters to convey the motivations of certain actions and to enable the reader to empathize with the characters. The poetry that comes is often aspects of those alternate mentalities, and sometimes helps me truly understand the subconscious drives of those individuals. Since I write fantasy, the results from having to deal with someone of a completely different background have me produce really odd stuff that sometimes confuses even me. I still look for a revelation of my emotion in the poetry, and if I don't see it then I consider the poetry of no worth. I thus find myself wondering what is your drive to write poetry.

oh that is very difficult to me to say it in eglish but i try it.
My german poems have much emotions and i feel it really
My big Problem by english poems is to bring the feelings and emotions in the poem.
i write since 2006 poetry, my live was bad and i lost my big love.
So i have write my pain on a paper. my girl friend means that is good and i can
write on a german side my poems. so i am two years now on the german side and write my poems. the most people like it. But not everybody can like your poem.

The most poems are about me ore my best friends. Now i try it in english and it is not so good. maybe i should give it up
In German it is really better
So i hope you can understand me a little bit and when not please ask

I would never say stop writing. While I might sound harsh, I do attempt to help you understand why I might not like something. I focus on mechanics, because I find it more helpful than saying 'I didn't like it.' People can easily see a problem with mechanics, so can correct that. Writing something that I like forces you to pander to my feelings, and that is not what you should do. Write stuff that has meaning to you.

As for developing your English, it all depends on your plans. I assume you have a reason to develop your English. I had a reason to learn other languages. I am not a linguist, so find it hard to work in other languages, but did so for reasons. What makes you want to write in English?

nice queation ^^ Snacker was on the german side and asked who writes english poems.
I have try it and so he invite me to this side

I've read Saphira's German poems and yes you can really feel the emotions in the poem. I know how hard it is to translate German poems into English ones, since I'm a Swiss-American. I never wrote poems in German though, always started in English right away. It is much easier, if you're English is good. But that is how I've learned the language the best, by writing things in English. When I go over things I wrote years back, I sometimes think: 'God Jesus what did I want to say?'. It is a good thing for me because I can see that I improved my English by noticing my own mistakes.

So if you need any help with translating the poems Jenny, I'm here for you and I can help you translating them.

Oh yeah sorry I forgot that you can read and write German ^^
So I ask you then for my next poem
Thanks

As I'm German, too, I always wrote a poem either in English or in German. Maybe Saphira, you can try to write a poem in English, which you have not written in German before.
Because I have experienced, that you cannot express the same feelings with the same (though translated) words in different languages.
I hope you understand what I want to say :-)
Nevertheless, your poems are still great.

Thank you Yeah I understand it. Now i try to write the poems in english.^^