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Is the phrase "Once upon a time..."
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 67% [ 2 ]
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Monthly Writing Prompt
For this month's writing prompt write a scene using the following sentence to start;

The streets were deserted. Where was everyone? Where had they all gone?

Writing Tip
Our monthly writing tips are written by our very own TerishD. You can read more in Terish's Blog located in "The Abstractions" area of the forum.

Look Back

When not able to write ahead, it helps to look back. In my case I had written a paragraph ahead of the story. What I needed to do was add a section of exposition (talking) presenting some facts. In going back, I realized that I could insert a section where a 'tour' of the surroundings could be done. This allowed for character interaction, story development, and other things that enabled me to present the facts in an entertaining manner.

One should not face a writer's block with the mentality of bursting through it. I have found in my own experience that a writer's block is usually due to my mind indicating that it has a problem in 'channeling' the story. One reason might be a re-imagining of certain story points. Another reason however is that there is a problem in where you are at in the story, so you need to look back and find out the problem with the 'journey' that prevents the tale from advancing.

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Number of posts : 818
Age : 39
Location : Stuck in Michigan
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Registration date : 2008-07-17

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PostSubject: The Love We Share   The Love We Share Icon_minitimeJuly 23rd 2008, 2:11 am

The wondrous moment of our meeting
I well remember you appear
My heart a moment later heating
Full of love and without fear

In ecstasy, my heart is beating
My entire body, passion and love
Your closeness was coming speeding
Like a love arrow from up above

When our eyes meet
I lose myself
Like in an ocean thousand miles deep
Full of love just from yourself

To hear your voice
Is like a sweet symphony
To feel sad, there is no choice
Because you own the deepest empathy

Through you I become a better man
A believer in love and trust
All the things I can
I learned from you just

With your beautiful present
You make the world a better place
From the heaven sent
You're like the best ace

I have seen us growing in love
And it will never end
In heaven like a white dove
For nobody to bend

That's our love we share
Insatiable, passionate and everlasting
For each other we always care
A connection which is long-lasting
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Age : 35
Location : Münster, Germany
Registration date : 2008-07-18

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PostSubject: Re: The Love We Share   The Love We Share Icon_minitimeJuly 23rd 2008, 4:36 am

Wow a long poem Smile I like it. I find it cool to hear from boys poems. Here in german you were gay xD Everybody here laugh a little but about poems, but i dont know why Rolling Eyes
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Location : Ringgold, Louisiana
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Registration date : 2008-07-21

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PostSubject: Reply   The Love We Share Icon_minitimeJuly 23rd 2008, 8:56 am

Ooh, a rhyming one. ABAB Simple.

Watch the meter. The rhythm falters in places, and I stumbled on the short third stanza. Also, some attempts at rhyme are forced and are not really easy to speak.

The topic is consistent. No development however, but almost a persistent driving of the same tone. Still, the emotion under discussion can do that to people, so no fault.

Concise wording is not an issue with this topic. Love is not an easily expressed feeling. I thus have to switch to the second issue for this rating, and that is DOES the wording put forth the emotion. Nice attempts. I will give credit.

Whoever you wrote this for should be pleased in hearing it (hopefully you had the courage and they were willing to listen). Nothing really special about the poem, but nothing to be ashamed about either. It can hold its place with the multitude of others poems in this category. I thus have to credit you with a good job.
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