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Is the phrase "Once upon a time..."
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Monthly Writing Prompt
For this month's writing prompt write a scene using the following sentence to start;

The streets were deserted. Where was everyone? Where had they all gone?

Writing Tip
Our monthly writing tips are written by our very own TerishD. You can read more in Terish's Blog located in "The Abstractions" area of the forum.

Look Back

When not able to write ahead, it helps to look back. In my case I had written a paragraph ahead of the story. What I needed to do was add a section of exposition (talking) presenting some facts. In going back, I realized that I could insert a section where a 'tour' of the surroundings could be done. This allowed for character interaction, story development, and other things that enabled me to present the facts in an entertaining manner.

One should not face a writer's block with the mentality of bursting through it. I have found in my own experience that a writer's block is usually due to my mind indicating that it has a problem in 'channeling' the story. One reason might be a re-imagining of certain story points. Another reason however is that there is a problem in where you are at in the story, so you need to look back and find out the problem with the 'journey' that prevents the tale from advancing.

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Saphira

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Saphira


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Number of posts : 124
Age : 35
Location : Münster, Germany
Registration date : 2008-07-18

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PostSubject: Im sorry...   Im sorry... Icon_minitimeJuly 22nd 2008, 12:30 pm

Forgive me
You must go
without me

I am not able to come
I visit you in the dream
Give you a kiss
Dont be sad.

You already create this.
I do not want to let you go
We must be strong
Do not forget me please

You are everything for me
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Age : 46
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Registration date : 2008-07-17

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PostSubject: Re: Im sorry...   Im sorry... Icon_minitimeJuly 22nd 2008, 8:59 pm

Forgive me
But you must go
Without me

I'm not able to come
I will visit you in a dream
Here's a kiss, don't be sad

I don't want you to go
We must be strong
Never forget me

You are everything to me!

Nice poem Saphira, here is a little rewrite I did. I hope you don't mind, I was trying to make it more readable. I'm not sure the rewrite was even acceptable. What do you think?
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Number of posts : 124
Age : 35
Location : Münster, Germany
Registration date : 2008-07-18

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PostSubject: Re: Im sorry...   Im sorry... Icon_minitimeJuly 23rd 2008, 4:21 am

I find it better ^^ yeah my problem is when i translate the poems they are then not the same Sad I can write my feeling not so good in english.
thank you for you rewrite Smile
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