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Is the phrase "Once upon a time..."
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Monthly Writing Prompt
For this month's writing prompt write a scene using the following sentence to start;

The streets were deserted. Where was everyone? Where had they all gone?

Writing Tip
Our monthly writing tips are written by our very own TerishD. You can read more in Terish's Blog located in "The Abstractions" area of the forum.

Look Back

When not able to write ahead, it helps to look back. In my case I had written a paragraph ahead of the story. What I needed to do was add a section of exposition (talking) presenting some facts. In going back, I realized that I could insert a section where a 'tour' of the surroundings could be done. This allowed for character interaction, story development, and other things that enabled me to present the facts in an entertaining manner.

One should not face a writer's block with the mentality of bursting through it. I have found in my own experience that a writer's block is usually due to my mind indicating that it has a problem in 'channeling' the story. One reason might be a re-imagining of certain story points. Another reason however is that there is a problem in where you are at in the story, so you need to look back and find out the problem with the 'journey' that prevents the tale from advancing.

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Saphira

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PostSubject: You not...   You not... Icon_minitimeJuly 22nd 2008, 5:37 am

Only, you are quite close
However, far away from my heart

I see you every day
You me not

I dream of you
You not of me

I love you
You love me not

I hate you for it
You me also?
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PostSubject: Re: You not...   You not... Icon_minitimeJuly 22nd 2008, 9:04 pm

I love this one, its so different to what I'm accustomed to reading.
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PostSubject: Re: You not...   You not... Icon_minitimeJuly 22nd 2008, 9:31 pm

I love these two lines;

I love you
You love me not

It reminds me of the old childhood game of pulling off flower peddles and saying, "he loves me" and then with the next, "he loves me not."
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PostSubject: Reply   You not... Icon_minitimeJuly 23rd 2008, 12:33 am

Yep, I figured it - non-rhyming dry weird poetry. You were nice to me however, so -

It did have meter. Slightly off, but not enough to throw the reader off track. In fact, what faltering was done did help emphasize certain words. Good.

It did have substance. Kept to a clear topic. Helps the reader feel that he connects with the poem. Good.

It did not waste words. The lines came across as a concise presence of intent. Such is the true point of poetry (especially the non-rhyming kind), so again Good.

Hey, cleared every hurdle. I am proud of you. Well done.
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PostSubject: Re: You not...   You not... Icon_minitimeJuly 23rd 2008, 1:40 am

I'm not sure where you are from TerishD, but maybe its weird to you, (and to me too sometimes) because she is from Germany.

The original text was written in German then later translated which is very hard to do, the translation is very hard to comprehend afterwards because of your difference in grammar and sentence structure.

Lets help her out with the structure.
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PostSubject: Re: You not...   You not... Icon_minitimeJuly 23rd 2008, 4:30 am

Yeah Hydra you are right, i never think about but now i find it great ^^
Thank you Kelly, but when he didnt like my poems it is okay Smile
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