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Is the phrase "Once upon a time..."
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Monthly Writing Prompt
For this month's writing prompt write a scene using the following sentence to start;

The streets were deserted. Where was everyone? Where had they all gone?

Writing Tip
Our monthly writing tips are written by our very own TerishD. You can read more in Terish's Blog located in "The Abstractions" area of the forum.

Look Back

When not able to write ahead, it helps to look back. In my case I had written a paragraph ahead of the story. What I needed to do was add a section of exposition (talking) presenting some facts. In going back, I realized that I could insert a section where a 'tour' of the surroundings could be done. This allowed for character interaction, story development, and other things that enabled me to present the facts in an entertaining manner.

One should not face a writer's block with the mentality of bursting through it. I have found in my own experience that a writer's block is usually due to my mind indicating that it has a problem in 'channeling' the story. One reason might be a re-imagining of certain story points. Another reason however is that there is a problem in where you are at in the story, so you need to look back and find out the problem with the 'journey' that prevents the tale from advancing.

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PostSubject: Inferno   Inferno Icon_minitimeSeptember 9th 2008, 6:59 am

The sentences in the italics are whispered, not sung.
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Scatter the daemons
There's a new world coming
Hold the sunlight
The moon shall bruise the skies

A new world order has
Come to life
Murders, anguish
Have caused this strife

I will design my death
I will cremate our love
Fear the threat
And care no more
No hope for us
In this world

The pain is eternal. Like a conflagration. Giving me some pacification...

Improvise your own destiny
My tears are my necklace
My darling
You would never understand

A new era is born
Tonight
Your lies and hate
Have dimmed the light

I will design my death
I will cremate our love
Fear the threat
And care no more
No hope for us
In this world

A sound so shallow. You barely heard the rasp. The tripping hour is long past...

Time's a murmur
I can never grasp
The black hole of denial
Has lasted too long

A new me is been created
From dust and heat
Emptiness
Has brought this feat

I will design my death
I will cremate our love
Fear the threat
And care no more
No hope for us
In this world
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PostSubject: Re: Inferno   Inferno Icon_minitimeSeptember 25th 2008, 1:14 am

You have a wonderful way with words. I enjoyed the song, even though the mood is a bit depressing, leaving me thinking about things I'd rather not. I'm reading it as a rock - punk piece, is this your intention?
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PostSubject: Re: Inferno   Inferno Icon_minitimeSeptember 25th 2008, 5:08 am

Thanks for the reply Kellycakes. ^^ Yes, I intended it to be punk-rock. That's not my usual genre as I write optimistic lyrics, but I randomly got thinking about dark themes and there it came down on the computer theme.
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PostSubject: Re: Inferno   Inferno Icon_minitimeSeptember 25th 2008, 10:14 am

Nice! Yup, I could imagine some grungy, dirt-laden guitar going on in the background with a pounding rhythm and some dude with a sinister voice doing the lyrics....this actually reminds me a bit of Opeth.

On the other hand, if I was given the song, I'd probably cast it in a minor key with a classical or acoustic guitar at first, and then kinda fill it up later with a nice tasty melodic solo....but that's just my style.

But yeah, great song! I should really give songwriting an honest try...
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