I can see the fire flickering in there
I watched the temperature lower everyday
And the thinnest sliver of a flame
All of my problems seem to blame themselves on you
It's the same with you too
When I'm lying to you I always feel good
I always look forward to the times when you're not here
When you are you can always see the disappointment on my face
Cruel words just take away the ghosts of smiles on our faces
That were never really there
The stanza is beautiful in the start, but I think you break the flow by superfluous verses. It makes them long, and IMO, the flow is disrupted. Consider for:
I always look forward to the times when you're not here
When you are you can always see the disappointment on my face
You could also say:
I look forward to your absence
Seeing you only brings disappointments
Or whatever.
Watching me
Everyday I know I'm falling further down that hill
That mountain
My own Mt. Everest
You know I walk just for me
I don't really do anything for you
I know that you can see and I know that you know
Even as you leave for work right now
Now I wish I could leave
You're watching all of me
Every single move that I make
Is a problem to you
Maybe all we need is just a breather
I'm crawling to the top
But you keep throwing those rocks
Nothing's going back to the way it was
It's hard for me
Too superfluous, IMO. You could say all of it in half the number of verses. Either add variety or reduce your verses.
I wish you would leave
You're watching me
I'm crawling to the top
You're throwing heavy rocks
From the top of this mountain that you stand
On and on
Nothing's going back to the way it was
Can't someone cry for me?
*Cough* *Cough* I don't know, but it seems almost amusing rather than poignant.
Overall, you picked a great start and the chorus is also fulfilling. Remember, this is my opinion and not the final verdict on your writing, so don't take it on heart. Use what you think is valid. ^^