Read it. Not my type of story. The protagonist really had nothing that caused me to care for him. Still, that is my bias and puts no reflection upon you. I agree that one should attempt a number of story styles and perspectives. I thus applaud you for taking on the challenge of this tale.
The only thing that truly bothered me was the actions of the Sherriff. If he had the bull horn, why would he be up close to the door? A number of other technical details bothered me (this is the twenty-first century, so the officers should have suspected cameras). I however understand that at times the movements of the players need to fit the story and not exactly reality.
Okay, I wish you well. Keep at it. You are working hard, so deserve any honor that you gain.
Fantasy puts more requirements on the writer than any other fiction, because the world must be made as real before anything else can be real.
Adult Christian fiction quite different than all the usual lame stuff in that market. "Dilemma of Dreams
" now in hard back.